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heartcore:. chp 01 page 18 REDUX by tlwelker heartcore:. chp 01 page 18 REDUX by tlwelker
AN UPDATE, YES! Asmodai is the new punching bag in this rewrite, isn't he? I promise he'll get some really cool moments though!

LOTS OF FAMILIAR FACES soon~

I want to apologize for the sluggishness of art in general from me, but I figured it'd be better to just WORK HARD instead of fumbling over myself in words, ha! I don't think I'm completely happy with how this page turned out, and if you have suggestions I'm all ears.
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:iconscarlettwing:
scarlettwing Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013
YOURE NOT YOU WHEN YO HUNGRY, ROYCE

Im loving how the redux is progressing so far! Royce being show, not tell is so in character for him omg (rip asmo)
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2013  Hobbyist
EAT A SNICKERSSSSSSS

I try ;; YOU'RE HELPING ME IN WAYS MISS JAZ
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:iconsalem-the-psychic:
Salem-the-Psychic Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013
Fuck Ame is awesome.
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:icontlwelker:
tlwelker Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist
She can be! Sometimes.
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Salem-the-Psychic Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
I so want her X3
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Axelarius Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
Eloquence: If you can't kill it with punches, use the furniture

[Alternate Text]
Demon Demolition Makeovers! If we can't swag up your domain, you can bring the house down on us free!
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:icontlwelker:
tlwelker Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist
Hahahah, quite the advertisement! In an Alternate Universe, where Royce is a home decorator!
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the-kid36 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
this is awesome as always :D
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:icontlwelker:
tlwelker Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist
Thank you very much!
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the-kid36 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Hobbyist
your welcome hun :D
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SonicGal390 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
And we find out what sinful demon Asmodai is Lust :3 guess Royce doesn't give a dang about his 2nd in command overfiend (Megatron and StarScream moments HA!) ^^; I feel sorry for Asmodai if he ends up being the butt monkey
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist
Naaaw, he doesn't. Mostly because Asmodai is soft on Ame but Y'KNOW~
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SonicGal390 Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ame just wants to nail Asmodai below the belt for being a idiot I thou X3
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negativedarkangel Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
Royce, crushing his own sub-ordinates, and proving he must be fairly powerfull or who would put up with this crap?
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:icontlwelker:
tlwelker Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2013  Hobbyist
He IS king after all!
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:iconnegativedarkangel:
negativedarkangel Featured By Owner Dec 5, 2013
yes, but what is royalty alone to a bunch of demons?
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foolyguy Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
The 'snapping' panel of the chandelier is difficult to see & hard to read.  Either tone down the letterbox effect, or brighten up the bindings a bit so we can see them better.  I also feel the 'snap' panel should be a bit smaller & the panel with just Ame, enlarged.

I also feel a little more saturation on Royce's spell effect would create a stronger visual hierarchy in that panel, as there's so much happening not only on this page, but that panel alone (visually) that it gets a little lost.  As such a stronger focus on the spell he's doing (a key story point in this page) would do a world of good IMO.

Other than that, great page with a lot of great details & lovely BG's/setpieces~

Also, Royce's a dick.
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Yar, I did the bulk of the changes you suggested, the bits where I wouldn't have to do some heavy reconstruction anyway! I also took the opportunity to make the cascading panels in the second half make more sense. Not sure what I was thinking on THAT one ;;

Hopefully it's more solid now! Thank you so much for your kudos and suggestions <3

THE BIGGEST DICK.
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foolyguy Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
Yah, just those simple changes really improved this page overall~ Amazing work!
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:icontlwelker:
tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Thanks, I try!
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GIJohn Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
Gotta love a punching bag -w-

Ruining his pretty-boy looks =p

And Ame looks so cute in the second image of her, big ol' eyes nwn
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
The best way to handle pretty boys!

Ame doesn't get her big ol' eyes enough these days, so I kinda shoehorned that yes haha!
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GIJohn Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
Right, she's usually all seductive looking, but she has big pretty eyes so got to enjoy them when we can n_n
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LadySiggy Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
If Asmodai becomes the punching bag, he might become my favorite! His indigo hair and color scheme in general definitely helps.
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
He's definitely geared towards it. I LIKE angst bucket characters - if they're handled in a way that isn't "OMG SO COOL, SO BROODING" and instead they're bopped around a bit!
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LadySiggy Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Huhuu, reminds me of one of my own. This gives me an idea!
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
SCARY POSSIBILITEEEEEEEESS.
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leviadragon99 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
Huh, devious little trick... not exactly sure why Royce did that though. :O
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Mostly as a show of power in a very flippant way, I'm starting from scratch so I gotta re-introduce the fact he's the head honcho!
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leviadragon99 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
Ahh, fair enough then.
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:iconk-e-y-k-o:
K-E-Y-K-O Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
excellent job on this page
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Thanks very much <3
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K-E-Y-K-O Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2013
you're very welcome^^
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Sorantheman Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013

I'm a bit confused here.

So did Ame do that or Royce?

I guess Royce's glowing hand would be a clue, but i'm still not sure.

Maybe the 4th panel could use improvement, I don't know.

Other than that, no major complaints.

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tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Royce, I figured the dialogue would help!

But yar, the 4th panel is definitely the weakest one here, the chandelier still being just visible may help! May need to edit a bit~ Thank you!
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NeoVersion7 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Student General Artist
"That'll work!"

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:icontlwelker:
tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
YES~
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meepmoopmah Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013
Hahaha Asmodai is a butt monkey.

Hrmmm, I can tell that Royce used magic to bring the table down but with how it's presented, it is a little confusing because you don't actually see him use the magic to bring it down. and Ame is missing her tie in one of the panels. Other than that, you've been doing a wonderful job. Your pages are a lot more detailed than they were before.
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Basically!

Yar, I wanted the action to seem lackadaisical but some clarification would be nice. Ame's tie is there! Just....up for a boob shot because I'm terrible. You can see it if you follow her brooch!

Thank you so much! For the kudos and the input <3
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BlackAries Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Asmodai should never have put his dick where it wasn't supposed to go. Now he has everyone mad at him. Haha
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:icontlwelker:
tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Dicks, getting so many men in trouble, even in the demon realm!
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BlackAries Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Sounds legit. Especially for an incubus. Haha
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Mementi-Mori Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013
is royce punishing asmodai, or was he just in the wrong place at the wrong time?
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:icontlwelker:
tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Both really, Royce suspects Asmodai due to his feelings but he's also a butthead.
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Mementi-Mori Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013
ah, well he always was a bit of a jerk.
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:iconxt1:
XT1 Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
pffff wow
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:icontlwelker:
tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Dem demons~
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XT1 Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist

LOL

 

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SHITFORBRAINSCHAN Featured By Owner Nov 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's just not his day today, it seems.

The only thing I may suggest here is to be careful with the placement of the panels, particularly in the second half of the page. The arrangement makes it just a tad confusing on where the eyes are suppose to follow. Doesn't mean that the page is all bad, there are certainly nice bits about it too, such as the angle on Royce in the second panel, as well as the expressions on their faces. Not too sure of what to make of Ame during the moment after the chandelier snaps, but it's not totally unclear. Well to me anyway.

Overall though, great page! Amusing, even!
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tlwelker Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2013  Hobbyist
Nope ;;

I definitely see whatcha mean, the eye is forced to go down for a good while in the second half. Deeefinitely something I need to keep in mind for future installments! (Basically, needed to cater the last BG more landscape than portrait when drawing it! Really I should do this with most backgrounds, makes em more versatile.) I'll definitely put that lesson in mind in the future, thank you!
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